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How to Captivate Readers With a Dazzling Loooong Sentence

by Henneke | 105 enchanting opinions, add yours? :)

How to write a long sentenceLong sentences?

Really?!?

Long sentences get a bad rap.

Because many writers abuse long sentences, cramming too many thoughts into each sentence, muddling up their message and leaving readers confused.

But long sentences can add poetic power and rhythm to your writing.

The main trick is to communicate only one idea with clarity.

Shall I show you?

An example of a beautiful long sentence

Tommy Orange is a master of poetic long sentences.

This is from his book There There—an ambitious novel about identity and urban life of Native Americans:

It’s important that he dress like an Indian, dance like an Indian, even if it is an act, even if he feels like a fraud the whole time, because the only way to be Indian in this world is to look and act like an Indian.

The sentence above contains 46 words. Despite this high word count, it’s easy to read because the sentence kicks off with the core of the sentence:

It’s important that he dress like an Indian

Then, the sentence branches out towards the end, but always staying on topic.

Each sentence has a core

This core gives readers a quick sense of who and what a sentence is about, such as:

  • The writer struggles
  • The girl screams
  • The train emerges
  • The sentence becomes difficult

To make a long sentence easy to read, put the whole core of your sentence at the start, or close to the start.

Note how this sentence is difficult to read because the core is broken up:

A long sentence, in which the writer delays the core to the middle of the sentence or in which the core is broken up so readers have to remember how the sentence started, is more difficult to read.

This version highlights the core:

A long sentence, in which the writer delays the core to the middle of the sentence or in which the core is broken up so readers have to remember how the sentence started, is more difficult to read.

And here’s the easier variant with the whole core at the start:

A long sentence becomes difficult to read when you delay the core until the middle of the sentence or when you break up the core. A broken core forces readers to remember how the sentence started, making it hard to figure out the structure.

Putting the core at the front is a simple trick to structure a long sentence and help readers devour your writing without running out of breath.

Savor the rhythm of a long sentence

Like a poem, a long sentence takes readers on a tiny journey, describing one thought, one feeling, one evocative scene.

You’ll appreciate a long sentence more when you read it aloud, savoring its rhythm. Here’s another example from There There—I’ve written it as a verse:

The train emerges,
rises out of the underground tube
in the Fruitvale district,
over by that Burger King
and the terrible pho place,
where East Twelfth and International almost merge,
where the graffitied apartment walls
and abandoned houses, warehouses,
and auto body shops appear,
loom in the train window,
stubbornly resist like deadweight
all of Oakland’s new development.

The sentence above describes one scene: how a train emerges in a rough, impoverished city district. The summing up of the graffitied apartment walls, abandoned houses, warehouses, and auto body shops gives you a feel of the overcrowded city life.

Note how the sentence starts with its core (the train emerges), then meanders through the rough buildings, and ends with a bang: stubbornly resist like deadweight all of Oakland’s new development.

Just like poetry, the start and the end lines of a long sentence are the most important. Here’s an even better example, showing the chaos and power of memories:

We are the memories
we don’t remember,
which live in us,
which we feel,
which make us sing
and dance
and pray the way we do,
feelings from memories
that flare and bloom
unexpectedly in our lives
like blood through a blanket
from a wound made by a bullet
fired by a man shooting us
in the back for our hair,
for our heads,
for a bounty,
or just to get rid of us.

Badly written long sentences drag on, but beautiful long sentences have energy, propelling readers from the start towards the end. As a reader, you feel a sense of anticipation wanting to know what comes next.

Long sentences are a natural part of how we communicate

You can even use long sentences in conversational writing, as Elizabeth Strout shows in her book Lucy by the Sea.

For instance:

He was seventy-one years old then, but he, kind of, I think, must have been plunged into some sort of midlife crisis, or older man crisis, with the loss of his much younger wife moving out and taking their ten-year-old daughter, and then his half-sister’s not wanting to see him and his finding out that his mother had not been who he’d thought she had been.

It’s easy to read, eh?

And it’s almost as if you can hear Strout talk to you. The filler words (kind of, I think) add to the conversational feel but the length of the sentence feels natural, too.

When we talk, we use long sentences, too. (And then this happened … and then … and then …)

When to use a long sentence

Tools like the Hemingway app encourage users to chop up all long sentences.

But an app doesn’t hear the rhythm of a sentence, like humans do.

And an app doesn’t understand the intense emotion of a long sentence. It doesn’t understand how a long sentence spurs readers on towards the last word, and then on to the next sentence. It doesn’t even understand how varying sentence length creates a pleasant rhythm.

Of course, there’s a difference between being engrossed in a novel, like There There, and reading online.

Online readers are often in a hurry, and they’re easily distracted. So, choose where to place long sentences carefully. Especially at the start of a blog post, newsletter, or social media post, keep your sentences short.

Once you’ve captivated readers, you can experiment with a longer sentence here or there:

  • Always read your work aloud to check the rhythm. Does it sound natural? If you’re running out of breath or stumbling over your words, try to rewrite.
  • Check how your sentence looks online. Large blocks of texts can put readers off. So, don’t overdo it.

You’re the writer … you’re in charge

Don’t write a long sentence to show off your grasp of grammar.

Don’t write a long sentence to impress your readers.

Instead, write a long sentence to express an idea with power and rhythm.

Have fun!

A long sentence (…) can put the reader on edge a little, so long as this does not feel like its main point, so long as it feels as if the sentence has no ulterior motive other than the giving of its own life-delighting self. This is what readability scores will never tell you. They deal only with reading ease, not the knottier, exacting pleasures of expectancy and surprise, the teasing way that long sentences suspend the moment of closure.
~ Joe Moran

Recommended reading on long and short sentences:

How to vary sentence length (& shine a spotlight on your key message)
The power of short (and the pleasure of long)
Sentence fragments: 6 ways to command attention

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  1. Rachel Cooper says

    April 14, 2025 at 2:36 am

    Thanks for this, Henneke. I sometimes focus too intently on keeping sentences short, but this is a lovely reminder of the power of varying sentence lengths. Once upon a time I was given an assignment to write a one-page story in a single sentence –and what fun that was! (I overdosed on semicolons, though.)

    Your writing advice always inspires.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 14, 2025 at 6:03 pm

      Ohhh, that sounds like such an interesting assignment. I might try it myself!

      Thanks so much for sharing, Rachel. I would probably use too many semicolons (or parentheses), too.

      Reply
  2. Andrea Phillips says

    April 9, 2025 at 11:12 am

    Hi Henneke,
    You expressed this concept well. I understand. Thanks! Reading and writing are also the joys in my life.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 9, 2025 at 7:56 pm

      Thank you, Andrea. Happy writing!

      Reply
  3. Miracle Odighiidany Abraham says

    April 9, 2025 at 8:34 am

    I always enjoy reading Henneke’s blog posts, like my heart literally skips for joy. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece and for consistently trying to make us all better writers.

    My take-home from this post is that long sentences can add rhythm and power to your text.

    We love you ❤️✨

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 9, 2025 at 9:19 am

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Miracle. Happy writing! ❤️

      Reply
  4. Kristina says

    April 8, 2025 at 11:36 pm

    This tip is a keeper! Thank you

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 9, 2025 at 9:18 am

      Thank you, Kristina. Happy writing!

      Reply
  5. Deniz says

    April 8, 2025 at 6:53 pm

    Influential writers I look up to, including you and Jon Morrow, are masters of combining long and short sentences in their work.

    PS: I admire how you can take a tiny detail like ‘loooong sentence’ and turn it into an insightful blog post. Always nice to hear from you, Henneke.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 8, 2025 at 8:42 pm

      Thank you, Deniz. I love taking a small detail, taking a closer look, and then writing a post about it. It’s my favorite type of post to write, especially if I have found great examples.

      Reply
  6. Dennis M. says

    April 8, 2025 at 6:00 pm

    Henneke,
    As a writer of poetry I appreciate the advice on reading the prose out loud, which I don’t do very often. Going forward I’ll read the prose out loud and also record the narration and play it back and listen. A second chance to hear where the flow and rhythm hit a speed bump or a pothole in the road.
    Thanks again for sharing your experience and insights

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 8, 2025 at 6:06 pm

      I think it’s interesting to read both prose and poetry aloud; it gives a different appreciation for the rhythm and how the word sounds.

      I’m glad you enjoyed this, Dennis. Thank you for stopping by.

      Reply
  7. Laurie Douglass-Wilson says

    April 8, 2025 at 3:59 pm

    Oh! This is so reassuring. Thank you! Sometimes, when I read Dicken’s works or other classic writers, I get lost in the long sentences and have to backtrack. I try to avoid them as a result, but your guidance really helps. Wonderful content, as always, Henneke!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 8, 2025 at 4:00 pm

      Yes, I’m with you. Long sentences can be tough to read but it’s possible to write them in a more natural, easy-to-read way. Happy writing!

      Reply
  8. Kit Dwyer says

    April 8, 2025 at 3:26 pm

    I compliment the way you explain these sort of writing details to us. The examples you provided are extremely helpful. This post in particular made me want to study long sentences in a way I never thought about previously. I appreciate you!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 8, 2025 at 3:54 pm

      That such lovely feedback. Thank you, Kit.

      Reply
  9. Rachelle says

    April 8, 2025 at 1:20 pm

    Henry James and Hemingway were both great writers. However, James preferred to write longer sentences rather than shorter ones. Personally, I like to mix it up!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 8, 2025 at 1:24 pm

      I like mixing it up, too!

      Reply
  10. Dave Arringdale says

    February 16, 2023 at 2:29 pm

    I loved this article! I have argued for years that well placed longer sentences can help drive home points and break up the monotony of many short sentences. Of course, the writing purists, argued otherwise.

    I’ve found that by strategically inserting meaningful long sentences into text surrounded by a bunch of brief sentences, the paragraph, and ultimately the article or chapter flow better. I use those longer sentences to transition or bridge thoughts that are critical…to drive points home.

    Thank you for sharing your article. We long sentence advocates appreciate you sharing your thoughts!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      February 16, 2023 at 5:44 pm

      Thank you, Dave. Nice to meet a fellow fan of long sentences 🙂

      I like what Roy Peter Clarke said about long vs. short sentences: “Long sentences take readers on a journey. Short ones tell the gospel truth.”

      Reply
  11. habeel says

    September 23, 2022 at 7:45 am

    hello Henneke This one is great! You make a lot of sense to have certain lengthy lines for special effects even if I always shorten sentences for SEO. (Yoast SEO will alert you if there are too many lengthy sentences.)
    This effectively demonstrates how to use lengthier sentences. When telling tales, you must employ them, and that is essentially what content marketing is all about.
    I appreciate you elucidating this for me today.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      September 23, 2022 at 12:54 pm

      I’m glad you found it useful! Too many long sentences make writing harder to read but the occasional long sentence can help create a more pleasant rhythm. Happy writing!

      Reply
  12. Ashe Jo says

    August 22, 2022 at 5:00 pm

    For the past half hour I’ve been analysing the longest sentence I’ve ever written because of Reasons. I found this tip incredibly helpful generally but also rather unhelpful to my particular sentence? And you still seem to be responding to comments, so here’s my sentence (and the one before and after); tell me what you think!
    –
    He made to move out the doorway into the corridor. Harry put down his sandwich, regretfully, scrambling up, calling, “Oh, no, wait!” but then Mrs. Weasley was interjecting with a, “Really professor there’s enough for everybody have you eaten yet oh well then you absolutely must join us!” and Snape was settled between Tonks and Bill looking as though he wasn’t quite sure how he’d ended up there.
    It was rather a tight fit over there.
    –

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      August 23, 2022 at 11:29 am

      It’s not always possible to follow sentences out of context. I do not know the story so I can’t really follow what’s happening here. My gut feeling is that this doesn’t need to be a long sentence and I’d be tempted to break it up.

      Reply
    • Han says

      April 8, 2025 at 4:09 pm

      You should purchase one of her writing courses.

      Reply
  13. Cathy Miller says

    February 15, 2022 at 7:47 pm

    Brilliant, as usual, Henneke. Was that too short? 😉

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      February 17, 2022 at 10:14 am

      Thank you, Cathy. It can never be too short 😉

      Reply
  14. Wally says

    April 5, 2021 at 1:44 pm

    Well, you made my day again. I found this article as I was getting ready to go to bed, with my eyelids getting heavy, my shoulders aching, my hands fumbling on the keyboard, my chest caving in, my stomach sagging down, my intestines gurgling, my knees aching from a long-ago operation, and my feet swelling from diabetes.

    Insanely useful advice.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 5, 2021 at 7:02 pm

      I imagine your dreams were talking to you in very long sentences! 🙂

      Reply
  15. Lubosi jr Maboshe says

    July 27, 2019 at 12:56 pm

    Hello Henneke,

    Sometime it’s hard to get a feel good read on a long sentence.The book you are recommending surely is attractive to read. Am looking forward to reading it soon.

    Thank you for your suggestions please continue writing these blogs.

    Thanks.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      July 27, 2019 at 8:37 pm

      I agree with you that many long sentences are hard to read. But when they’re well written, they’re easy to read and engaging.

      Thank you for stopping by, Lubosi. Happy writing!

      Reply
  16. Zaheer Ahmed says

    April 30, 2019 at 7:28 am

    It’s so nice hearing you teach like I am sitting in the classroom of my favourite teacher, whose looks and style inspires me to learn what she is teaching, every word, every sentence captivating my imagination and propelling me towards a beautiful journey of thoughts and concepts until all of she has said fills my mind and my heart and remains there as an unforgettable memory forever. You are amazing.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 30, 2019 at 3:38 pm

      That’s a great long sentence. Thank you for your compliment! 🙂

      Reply
  17. Alison Beere says

    April 29, 2019 at 12:51 pm

    Hi Henneke

    I’ve just come back to read this post and it rings all the bells for me because I have been wrestling with those dreaded readability scores recently ?.

    I got the dreaded ‘not enough transition words’ message a couple of times last week and plodded back and forth through my text, second-guessing myself.

    In the end I trusted my gut, and I am sure all will work out well.

    Conveying a mood accurately feels like the most important consideration. Once I feel I’ve achieved that, I audit to see whether I have enough variety in my sentence lengths.

    Thanks for the permission to use longer sentences even when the SEO plug-in starts complaining!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      April 29, 2019 at 7:34 pm

      That SEO plug-in complains for almost every one of my blog posts that I don’t use enough transitions. Plus it complains that I start consecutive sentences with the same word and urges me to mix it up. I refuse to follow this advice.

      Transitions can be made in many different ways, and I don’t think the plug-in gets this right, and repetition is a style choice.

      I’m glad your trusting your intuition as a writer. ?

      Good to see you again, Alison 😀 🙂

      Reply
  18. Lin Cochran Burgin says

    April 25, 2019 at 4:22 pm

    The best long sentence I ever wrote:
    Once I stopped screaming, hovering, and watching me pretending to be okay, and once my world stopped shrinking down to the size of a black dot where nothing existed but Andy’s absence in my life, and once I stopped going through the motions, so to speak, as though nothing had happened, the numbness began to lift.

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    • Henneke says

      April 25, 2019 at 6:22 pm

      That sentence is full of emotion. Thank you for sharing.

      Reply
  19. Leonardo Candoza says

    March 30, 2019 at 9:44 pm

    Long sentences can establish content as written by a trusted resource, because it shows they have a lot to say and if they didn’t have a lot of valuable stuff to say they would have chosen to write a short sentence instead.

    Cheers,
    Leonardo Candoza

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 31, 2019 at 6:46 pm

      You can say a lot in shorter sentences, too, and you have a better chance of readers actually understanding you when your average sentence length is relatively short.

      Reply
  20. Grant says

    March 27, 2019 at 12:47 pm

    Thank you for this Henneke

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 27, 2019 at 1:52 pm

      You’re welcome, Grant. What was useful to you?

      Reply
  21. Bridget Holland says

    March 26, 2019 at 11:07 pm

    I think the key is about mixing the long sentences with shorter ones. So for anyone who was challenged, there’s a chance to rest and recover.

    Try putting Shane Snow’s famous readability post into the Hemingway app. (This one: https://contently.com/2015/01/28/this-surprising-reading-level-analysis-will-change-the-way-you-write/)
    The overall reading level is Grade 8, but there are lots of individual ‘very-hard-to-read’ long sentences. It’s the mix!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 27, 2019 at 12:30 pm

      Yes, it’s about mixing short and long.

      When I checked Shane Snow’s post, I found that all long sentences have the core at the start or almost at the start.

      If you’re interested, statistician Ben Blatt shares a similar analysis (on sentence length of the classics) in his book “Nabokov’s Favorite Word Is Mauve”—this also includes some interesting analysis of the use of -ly adverbs by famous writers.

      Thank you for stopping by, Bridget.

      Reply
  22. Ray Khan says

    March 26, 2019 at 5:20 pm

    Awesome!
    I was gifted that book.
    Now I can’t wait to read it.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 27, 2019 at 12:14 pm

      I hope you’ll enjoy it, too!

      Reply
  23. Kitty Kilian says

    March 26, 2019 at 11:40 am

    Nice post! The Hemingway- and other apps sometimes come to weird conclusions. As does Yoast’s style advice. It keeps summoning me to write easier sentences. Ha! I already have a truly good Hemingway score. So I ditched the style advice.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 27, 2019 at 12:13 pm

      Yes, I find Yoast worse than Hemingway. Yoast has weird advice about transitions and repetition, too. Perhaps Yoast should stick to SEO 😉

      Reply
  24. Virginia says

    March 23, 2019 at 1:00 pm

    I was very intrigued when I received this article. What? Somebody actually recommending long sentences? I agree with everything you said.

    I always see stories as a big meal, the small appetisers, the main course, the second and delicious second course and dessert. The meal is especially interesting when there’s variety, some plates are small, others big and there’s diversity in the flavours. I am against short sentences in the same way I am against quick meals. In the same way I cook and eat with people that enjoy eating, I write for people who enjoy reading. And that includes loooooong sentences too 🙂

    God, I am suddenly feeling hungry.

    Thanks for such a refreshing post!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 24, 2019 at 4:20 pm

      I love this: “I cook and eat with people that enjoy eating, I write for people who enjoy reading.”

      It made me remember once briefly traveling with someone who didn’t enjoy eating, and it was such a pity. For me, one of the highlights of traveling is getting to savor new foods. When you’re with someone who doesn’t get that, a lot of the traveling fun is gone.

      Here’s to good food and good sentences! 🙂

      Reply
  25. Ryan K Biddulph says

    March 23, 2019 at 8:07 am

    If you establish the proper tempo, long sentences flow beautifully. One needs to beef things up clearly without adding any fluff or bloat.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 24, 2019 at 4:13 pm

      I like seeing long sentences as cumulative or expanding—you don’t overstuff a simple sentence, but rather you add more at the end so it becomes an intriguing journey. Thank you for stopping by again, Ryan!

      Reply
  26. Judith says

    March 22, 2019 at 6:07 pm

    Sometimes it feels like we’re under attack from the sharp staccatos of modern communication. Abrupt. Get to the point. Move on. Don’t waste time or take too much space. Oh, I’m not downing on short sentences. Good ones – meaningful ones – can be difficult to write and they are certainly key in today’s marketing world. But the beauty of a well-crafted long sentence … it’s like taking time out to ride with the flow of the words and discover meaning. I guess it’s truly an art form, and one that won’t fade away as long as there are people like you to keep it alive! Thanks so much for posting, Henneke.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 24, 2019 at 4:11 pm

      I also feel sometimes under attack of modern communication. It’s so relentless. No better way to escape than with a good book, well written. 🙂

      Thank you for stopping by, Judith.

      Reply
  27. Thea says

    March 20, 2019 at 10:37 pm

    One of my favorite sentences by scientist Rachel Carson, approximately 68 words:

    “If I had influence with the good fairy who is supposed to preside over the christening of children I should ask that her gift to each child in the world be a sense of wonder so indestructible that it would last throughout life, as an unfailing antidote against the boredom and disenchantments of later years, the sterile preoccupation with things that are artificial, the alienation from the sources of our strength.”

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 21, 2019 at 10:55 am

      Yes, I like it! Thank you for sharing.

      Reply
  28. chooki says

    March 20, 2019 at 6:50 pm

    YES this is so true:
    “write a long sentence to express an idea with power and rhythm.”
    Thank you so much 🙂

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 20, 2019 at 9:08 pm

      And hank you for stopping by! 🙂

      Reply
  29. Christine Leedy says

    March 20, 2019 at 9:15 am

    Love this Henneke. Long sentences can be a problem for many students visiting the university writing center. I can’t wait to share your tips with them, so they can write beautiful rather than dull long sentence. Thanks again Henneke!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 20, 2019 at 9:07 pm

      Thank you, Christine. Long sentences seem to be a funny problem—either people shy away from them completely or they write them but don’t realize how convoluted their long sentences are.

      Reply
  30. Mark says

    March 20, 2019 at 1:20 am

    “This sentence has five words. Here are five more words. Five-word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety.

    Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium length. And sometimes, when I am certain the reader is rested, I will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cymbals–sounds that say listen to this, it is important.”

    Gary Provost

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 20, 2019 at 9:05 am

      Yes, that’s a good one! 🙂 I didn’t want to get into sentence variation for this post; it’s a big enough topic to write a whole post about.

      Thank you stopping by, Mark.

      Reply
  31. Joan Bell says

    March 20, 2019 at 12:58 am

    I was enthralled by Henrietta for minutes before I even got to the post. Such a beautiful, simple, vibrant graphic. There is definitely an art to the long sentence. Thanks for sharing such beautiful examples.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 20, 2019 at 9:03 am

      I really had to think long about what image to create for this post. How could I express the idea of a long sentence? I was quite happy with the result. So, thank you for mentioning it 🙂

      Reply
  32. Danae says

    March 19, 2019 at 11:47 pm

    I loved this post. There’s nothing better than reading a long sentence that so… yummy? I’ve read a-many-a-sentence that each addition to that long sentence just builds to the over-all description the writer is trying to give.

    I’ve also had it go the other way and lost my breath… ugh.

    Thank you for this post and showing that long sentences can be great.

    I love all of your stuff and always look forward to them.

    Until next time,
    Danae I.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 20, 2019 at 9:02 am

      Yes, so true. Most long sentences wear me down, but when you read a good one … it’s wonderful.

      Thank you for your lovely comment, Danae. I appreciate it.

      Reply
  33. Sue-Ann Bubacz says

    March 19, 2019 at 11:10 pm

    Henneke:

    How do I love ❤️ ?? this one…in oh soooo many ways!!

    Best always—Sue-Ann

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 20, 2019 at 9:01 am

      Thank you, Sue-Ann. Henrietta sends her regards ❤️ ??

      Reply
  34. Andrew Healey says

    March 19, 2019 at 8:32 pm

    As a writer, I avoid long sentences like the plague. Now, though, thanks to you, I might use the odd long sentence from time to time.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 9:20 pm

      As my confidence as writer has grown in recent years, I’ve found myself making my sentences gradually longer. I still use very long sentences sparingly, but I’m not afraid of using them any more.

      Happy writing, Andrew! And thank you for stopping by.

      Reply
  35. Anita Nelam says

    March 19, 2019 at 7:07 pm

    As the Queen of the long sentence, I concur with your analysis. Thanks for the excellent advice.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 7:14 pm

      Thank you, your Majesty 🙂 I’m glad you concur!

      Reply
  36. Marisa says

    March 19, 2019 at 5:38 pm

    I love this post. Specially this part:

    “an app doesn’t understand the intense emotion of a long sentence”

    How such a complex insubordinate idea be put in such an enchanting way?

    Only you can Henneke 🙂 Bravo!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 7:14 pm

      Thank you so much, Marisa. Fortunately, algorithms can’t write as well as we can. 🙂

      Reply
  37. Thea says

    March 19, 2019 at 5:04 pm

    WONDERFUL. I am going to put a link to this post in my post on “using short sentences,” lol!! Seriously, doing that right now.
    I love the grace a long sentence brings to its shorter brethren. But previously I could not figure out an easy, clear way to explain HOW one can go about writing a long sentence that has both clarity and grace. You’ve done it again!!

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:16 pm

      I faced exactly the same challenge… finding an easy way to explain how to write a long sentence (without getting stuck in grammar discussions!).

      I appreciate your link and your comment, Thea. Thank you.

      Reply
  38. Nicki Goff says

    March 19, 2019 at 4:11 pm

    I loved this! Paying attention to the rhythm of a long sentence and the flow of details adding to the image is so effective – when done right. Loved the examples you give, and the idea of the core idea right up front.

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:15 pm

      Thank you, Nicki. I had wanted to write about long sentences for a long time, but I had never come across examples that inspired me … until I read There There.

      Happy writing!

      Reply
  39. Kristina says

    March 19, 2019 at 3:49 pm

    Thanks for such solid, how-to advice. Great analysis of how to make the long sentence work!

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:14 pm

      Thank you, Kristina. Happy writing!

      Reply
  40. Mariluz says

    March 19, 2019 at 3:38 pm

    Great advice! I just realized why I use to write long sentences. I want to give more detail on what I think. And I just write exactly what I think (in that same order), so it is hard to understand. I’ll start using this technique in the editing phase. I’m sure it would be really useful, is it was really hard for me to cut my long sentences and still say what I wanted to.

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:14 pm

      Yes, you can use your first draft just to get your thoughts down, not worrying about sentence structure. Then when you edit, you can improve clarity, flow and rhythm.

      Reply
  41. Bev says

    March 19, 2019 at 3:14 pm

    Putting the sentence’s core at the start instantly made sense, yet it’s not something I’d ever considered before. Thanks for another great tip Henneke, and your lively illustration made it even better.
    Goed gedaan!
    Best wishes from an English woman living in the Netherlands 🙂

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:12 pm

      So, we’ve swapped places—crossing The Channel in opposite directions 🙂

      Thank you for stopping by, Bev.

      Reply
  42. David LeBlanc says

    March 19, 2019 at 2:35 pm

    Henneke, you confirmed what I have often thought about long sentences. If the flow is good and it fits, use it, but sparingly.

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:11 pm

      Yep, that’s it. It’s about flow and rhythm. Thank you for stopping by, David 🙂

      Reply
  43. Kate Fisher says

    March 19, 2019 at 1:23 pm

    I love the way you give easy-to-follow advice and yet you are talking about the soul of writing, something that is harder to explain but you know when you see and feel it. Your point about the Hemingway app is so true. Technology can analyze all sorts of things quickly but only the soul can recognize enchantment.

    Thank you, Henneke (and Henrietta)!

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 5:11 pm

      Thank you so much, Kate. I love your point about the soul of writing. The more I’ve been writing, the more important that has become to me.

      I appreciate your comment (and Henrietta sends her regards 🙂 )

      Reply
  44. Veronica says

    March 19, 2019 at 12:48 pm

    Another great post I can put into practice immediately.

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 3:16 pm

      Thank you, Veronica 🙂 Happy writing!

      Reply
  45. Kathy Keats says

    March 19, 2019 at 12:07 pm

    What a wonderful article on the ‘art’ of writing. We get so caught up in the technical aspects we forget about giving it life. Loved it!

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 12:12 pm

      I’m inclined to think that the technical aspects are way less important than most of us think. Focusing on communicating with clarity is so much more important. Plus learning to listen to how your writing sounds (and what you’re really communicating).

      Reply
  46. Jeff Meister says

    March 19, 2019 at 12:00 pm

    Brilliant post, Henneke! Thanks… it was perfect timing too. How do you do that?

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 12:03 pm

      Telepathy, Jeff. That’s my secret 😉

      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

      Reply
  47. Maggie says

    March 19, 2019 at 11:52 am

    As always, you get to the heart of my struggle and bring clarity with a few written words. Thank you for that!

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 11:54 am

      Thank you, Maggie. That makes me happy 🙂

      Reply
  48. Elfin says

    March 19, 2019 at 11:35 am

    You had me at ” gobble up for readers.” I fell in love with that sentence! And then I read the rest of the post…

    Great ideas. Will start implementing them although I think it requires higher writing skills than I have just now.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 11:52 am

      You don’t have to make the sentences as crazy long as the ones by Tommy Orange. But it’s a great exercise to try longer sentences and play with the rhythm.

      Reply
  49. Rachel Cooper says

    March 19, 2019 at 11:25 am

    I love this! Thanks, Henneke.

    Reply
    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 11:26 am

      Thank you, Rachel. Happy writing!

      Reply
  50. Lisa Sicard says

    March 19, 2019 at 11:19 am

    Hi Henneke, I Love this one! I am always cutting sentences for SEO but you make a lot of sense to have some long sentences for special effects. (Yoast SEO always tells you when you have too many long sentences.)
    This really explains how to use longer sentences effectively. You need to use them when telling stories and that’s what content marketing is really about.
    Thanks for clarifying this for me today!

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    • Henneke says

      March 19, 2019 at 11:26 am

      The Yoast plugin is good for SEO, but the advice on readability is limited. For instance, the plugin complains when I start consecutive sentences with the same word and it often complains that I don’t use enough transition words. But when your writing is clear, you don’t need that many transition words.

      What’s most important is clarity, and as far as I know apps can’t really measure clarity yet, so trust your own judgment as a writer 🙂

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      • Elena de Francisco says

        March 19, 2019 at 12:10 pm

        Indeed, I have also noticed that. I basically don’t pay attention to the Yoast plugin anymore regarding readability.
        Your advice makes totally sense Henneke, as always 🙂
        Thank you

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        • Henneke says

          March 19, 2019 at 12:13 pm

          I ignore that part, too, and only check I get a green light for SEO. One day, I’ll write a post about that 🙂

          Reply
      • Joe Pairman says

        June 4, 2023 at 6:58 pm

        Having discovered your blog just last week, I’ve got some catching up to do! Like the other posts, this one is great. Lovely examples (I always like Joe Moran), and I particularly like your irreverence to the mechanistic style guides and tools. On that point, specifically on the transition words – have you noticed that if you ask ChatGPT for an opinion, it comes back full of them? “However,” “Firstly,” “Therefore,” and so on. It sounds like a well-drilled high school student jumping through another exam.

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        • Henneke says

          June 5, 2023 at 10:29 am

          I haven’t played that much with ChatGPT but that doesn’t surprise me. I have the Yoast SEO plugin installed on this blog and it suggests that I’m not using enough transitions. If anything, I personally feel like I should reduce rather than increase transitions. Too many transitions makes writing sound too smooth, too well-drilled, too mechanistic, and it feels a bit as if the writer doesn’t trust the reader to understand the sentences and how they relate.

          Thanks so much for stopping by, Joe, and for your kind words on my blog. 🙂

          Reply

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